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Commissioners,
The proposed ordinance includes a grammatical error that I have previously brought to your attention and you appear to have chosen to ignore. So, I’m trying again with help from a neutral
party.
3. B. b. Collection companies shall provide residential customers with a choice of either an approximate 95-gallon cart of and approximate 65-gallon cart with no difference in monthly
service fees between the sizes of recycling containers.
I believe the intent was:
3. B. b. Collection companies shall provide residential customers with a choice of either an approximate 95-gallon cart or an approximate 65-gallon cart with no difference in monthly
service fees between the sizes of recycling containers.
I asked a third party:
What's wrong with this sentence: "Collection companies shall provide residential customers with a choice of either an approximate 95-gallon cart of and approximate 65-gallon cart with
no difference in monthly service fees between the sizes of recycling containers."
ChatGPT said:
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Yes, the sentence has several issues related to grammar, word choice, and clarity. Here's the original:
"Collection companies shall provide residential customers with a choice of either an approximate 95-gallon cart of and approximate 65-gallon cart with no difference in monthly service
fees between the sizes of recycling containers."
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✅ Issues Identified:
1. Grammatical error:
* "an approximate 95-gallon cart of and approximate 65-gallon cart" is incorrect. The phrase is jumbled and missing proper structure for parallelism.
* Also, "of" doesn't belong there.
2. Repetition of "approximate":
* It reads awkwardly; “approximately” might flow better depending on the context, but even then, the redundancy can be reduced.
3. Awkward phrasing:
* "with no difference in monthly service fees between the sizes of recycling containers" is clunky. It can be more clearly said.
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✅ Suggested Revision:
"Collection companies shall provide residential customers with a choice of either a 95-gallon or a 65-gallon recycling cart, with no difference in monthly service fees between the two
sizes."
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Optional (more formal version):
"Collection companies shall offer residential customers a choice between 95-gallon and 65-gallon recycling carts, without any difference in monthly service fees based on the container
size."
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Thank you for your attention to this matter.
Tom Thiersch
Jefferson County, WA